Can you please proofread this?

Hi. I have a Skyrim mod called Awesome Artifacts which lets you upgrade Konahrik to Ysmir at the Skyforge by merging it with the other Dragon Priest masks after ending the civil war and becoming the Thane of every hold. On the Wooden Mask's effect "Bromjunaar's Mystery", I wrote a new description:

Gein jun wah rel niin pah, gein luft wah siiv niin;
Gein Konahrik wah vokrii fin gol ahrk ko ek yol gron niin.
Which is supposed to mean:
One king to rule them all, one face to find them;
One Warlord to restore the land/earth and in her fire(s) bind them.

And on the Ysmir mask, I'm writing:
"Zu'u tinvaak nu, ol jun, ahrk heim daar goli."
Is it correct to use the -i possessive suffix on gol in that context?
It's implied that the poetic Imperial scholars have paraphrased it as:
"I breathe now, in royalty, and reshape this land which is mine."

If you're interested, here's a link to the mod:
https://www.nexusmods.com/skyrimspecialedition/mods/13776

Thank you!

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